Old 08-10-2004, 01:34 PM   #1
darktoaster
FFR Player
 
Join Date: Sep 2003
Posts: 23
Default Best/Deepest poem ever. Discuss

Once upon a time
I came up with a little rhyme
So this is it
I hope that it will be a hit
There once was a little boat
But it could not float
It just sunk
Because it was missing a big ol' chunk
Water rushed in
Through the hull made of tin
Until it was full
Forming a big pool
All of the fishes
Thought that the wreck was the solution
To all of their wishes
Because they were sick of swimming in polution
They all loved the ship
And they all felt so hip
Because they were tired of swimming in sewage
The fish turned the ship into a disco
But it was a big risk though
Because it used enough electricity
To light a big sign that said Electric Kittie
That was the name of their club
Which was run by a mean fish named Bub
Bub ran the club with an iron fist
He wouldn't let anyone in who wasn't on his list
Many fish waited all day
But he just made them go away
Some of the dissappointed fishies cried and cried
Because they were rejected everytime they tried
Then one day a smart fish named Wubba Wubba
Decided to start his own club named Hubba Hubba
Now Big Dubya as he liked to be called
Was very very bald
But he did not care
Because no fish have any hair
His new club was a hit
And Big Bub said @&$!
As he threw a big fit
Bub made a plan
To make his club the best in the sea
He decided that he should start to sell tea
But then he realized that he was not a man
And he could not drink tea
Even if it was in the sea
The moral to the story is this
Never drink anything that looks like .....
That is the end of my story
And please don't worry
I will never write anything like that
Again until you buy me a big fluffy hat
__________________
darktoaster is offline  
Old 08-10-2004, 01:51 PM   #2
tnyhwk900
FFR Player
FFR Simfile Author
 
tnyhwk900's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2003
Location: in your pocket
Age: 30
Posts: 4,106
Send a message via AIM to tnyhwk900
Default

X_X Ouch. That was bad. Way too much rhyme-forcing.
__________________
tnyhwk900 is offline  
Old 08-10-2004, 02:10 PM   #3
flypie743
FFR Player
 
flypie743's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jun 2004
Location: fairyland
Posts: 3,210
Send a message via AIM to flypie743
Default

Weird poem...
__________________

IF YOU ARE THE BOMB YOU WILL CLICK THIS and if you dont, you suck.
flypie743 is offline  
Old 08-10-2004, 02:11 PM   #4
lightdarkness
Summer!!
Retired StaffFFR Veteran
 
lightdarkness's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2003
Location: New York
Age: 32
Posts: 11,308
Send a message via AIM to lightdarkness Send a message via MSN to lightdarkness Send a message via Yahoo to lightdarkness Send a message via Skype™ to lightdarkness
Default

Nice rhymes.
__________________
lightdarkness is offline  
Old 08-11-2004, 01:30 PM   #5
jazzmosis
FFR Player
 
jazzmosis's Avatar
 
Join Date: Sep 2003
Location: The sunny beaches of Canada
Age: 35
Posts: 521
Send a message via AIM to jazzmosis
Default

That hardly even classifies as a poem. Too much forced rhyming, there's a lack of concrete imagery, and the poem goes nowhere.
__________________

Quote:
Originally Posted by JurseyRider734
<3 Jazzoo.
jazzmosis is offline  
Old 08-11-2004, 02:46 PM   #6
darktoaster
FFR Player
 
Join Date: Sep 2003
Posts: 23
Default

You are such a confused little man. What you failed to see was the underlying symbolism found in the poem.
__________________
darktoaster is offline  
Old 08-11-2004, 02:49 PM   #7
fusi0n
FFR Player
 
fusi0n's Avatar
 
Join Date: Nov 2003
Location: Indianapolis, IN
Age: 32
Posts: 2,158
Send a message via AIM to fusi0n
Default

That sounds like something from Where the Sidewalk Ends. (about as deep as a kiddie pool.)
__________________
fusi0n is offline  
Old 08-12-2004, 06:09 AM   #8
SotN
FFR Player
 
Join Date: Dec 2002
Posts: 1,159
Send a message via AIM to SotN
Default

A lost path; alien time
Familiar route; cellar door


OH MAN I R TEH BEST.
SotN is offline  
Closed Thread


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump



All times are GMT -5. The time now is 05:26 PM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.1
Copyright ©2000 - 2021, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Copyright FlashFlashRevolution