04-11-2009, 04:10 AM | #1 |
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The Reasons
Hai guys. This is a poem I made a while ago. Tell me if u like it! CnC please, ratings if u want.
THE REASONS There is a reason why I smile There is a reason why I pray There is a reason why I always want To go to school today There is a reason why I laugh There is a reason whi I cry There is a reason why I always want To go ahead and try There is a reason why I love there is a reason why i care There is a reason why i always want To be right there There is a reason why I live There is a reason for life, too But I can't find the reasons why The reasons all point to you Thankyou Last edited by ..::Dance::..; 04-11-2009 at 04:18 AM.. |
04-11-2009, 04:17 AM | #2 |
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Re: The Reasons
k ?_?
pink font didnt help
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04-11-2009, 04:19 AM | #3 |
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04-11-2009, 04:22 AM | #4 |
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it's really really corny
but i dont know anything poems
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04-11-2009, 10:33 AM | #5 |
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Re: The Reasons
Well, it's certainly cute...
But, in all honesty, it lacks a sense of originality. You may have written this poem, but I have read countless iterations of it. The best poems are those that succeed at providing the reader with a unique perspective, yet this poem has failed in that regard.
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04-24-2009, 11:58 PM | #6 |
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Just like Engler said it is something seen a million times, but don't take that too personally, we all have done it at least once in our lives.
I really like the flow of the poem. It would be appreciated if there was a little more punctuation. Why is spelled wrong "whi" no biggy though. Truthfully there isn't much wrong at all. It is well put together, there could be a few different word choices to make a bigger impact on the reader. But overall great. |
04-25-2009, 12:02 AM | #7 |
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And the reason is you~
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