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That really bothered me lol, looked like you wanted black smoke but against a slightly different shade black background it just looked weird.
Explosion was sick, but the final font was a little hard to read, felt too "fuzzy" Might as well give constructive criticism because generally we all know what you make is going to be at least good, so why not shoot for amazing ![]()
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Yeah now that you mention it the font is a bit small even at full screen. I'll go ahead and bump that up a few points. Yeah this splotchy crap is terrible, and youtube made it even worse. Going to have to end up putting a background plate in there.
k fixed everything. https://secure.vimeo.com/36897928
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lol happy
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Yeah a lot better, font is more readable.
Cool stuff 8)
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Something about the transition from the . to the i really looks..weird? to me but I can't place what it is. It seems too sudden and blunt, I guess, like if you were making a short film and a person randomly appeared in your shot.
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Yea, I'd say give it a half a second to a second more of looking at the "." of the i , with the bottom half coming in a at the same time as it is now. And possibly make the zoomout a bit slower
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Dude. Teach me.
For the record, that is rather close to the sort of blue/black techy/space style I was trying to describe earlier. Last edited by Reincarnate; 02-16-2012 at 06:10 PM.. |
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I'm not saying it can't be an abrupt appearance, but it just seems like the way it is now it doesn't flow well like the rest of the clip. If there was like a flash of light and it was suddenly there, it might even make more sense. Iunno, my 2 cents.
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I'll play around with the timing at the end and see if I can get something that flows a little better.
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Not necessarily a career, but I'd like to be able to actually make cool shit for any games I design.
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:\ the way the text just falls there doesn't seem so abstract like you had before, if it kinda just formed like steam or something like that, it would probably look better
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I don't want to overdo it with crazy effects everywhere, there's got to be a calming point, and I want the focus to end on the name of the company, not the effects.
Uploading the extended ending version now. ** https://vimeo.com/36937611
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Very very narrow text, and I don't think it stands out as much as it should. IMO for your personal company I'd work out something that's as sleek, but bolder. Is the wordmark itself also the logo you'd be using?
My only nitpick though, the rest works fine ![]()
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oh I guess my computer is to blame for false criticism this time, sorry ds, it works better if you can actually see the planet/sphere turn into the dot over the I, xD
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FAKE
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