[psychoangel691]

Judge: TC_Halogen

Freedom Dive v2 (XelNya) [5.5/10]
Artist: xi -- Perms: OK

- 2.321/etc: misrhythm for kick, should be a 16th later - happens a few times
- 9.476: missing note?
- 16.833: ghost note; set of three 16ths starts at the 8th
- 22.571: not sure what’s being followed here that deserves attention given that it doesn’t remain accented throughout the section
- 41.066 to 44.306: the alternating in and out of following the melody just feels strange here, and also contributes to what is an ongoing issue with overall difficulty variance
- 46.668: missing note for kick
- 1:12.858: ^
- 1:40.736: remove jump
- 1:43.706: this mid-phrase change is really jarring and kinda removes the focus of the buildup that was decently structured with the triples and 8ths
- 1:46.946: should be 16ths
- 1:56.058: missing note
- 1:58.758: missing note for kick
- 2:01.661: missing note for melody
- 2:02.606: strange jump
- 2:04.833: missing note for kick
- 2:05.576: missing jump for clap
- 2:15.296: misrhythm
- 2:21.033: improper PR
- some jump representation inconsistencies off of your structure: 1:53.561: two jumps, 2:01.931: one jump, 2:10.571: one jump -- all instances of two consecutive kicks that you selectively accent
- additionally: 1:51.736 - seven consecutive jumps for seven kicks, 2:08.816 - only five consecutive jumps for seven kicks
- structure is inconsistent and difficulty variance is very wild
- song isn’t the most suitable for an OT anyway given that the v1 is gated as is

Sunset Sky Garden (gold stinger) [6.5/10]
Artist: Feather -- Perms: OK

- your offset does not properly reflect the song’s time signature/notation and the BPMs that you add actually put the song offset to a pink note; set the BPM to a flat 128 with no changes anywhere with an offset of -0.928 for correctly colored rhythms and proper measure placement
- 8.271: the drums actually play another here; it’s not like the two prominent snares in the first two instances
- 8.506/8.740: more missing percussion notes, some toms here
- 10.459: wouldn’t this be better on [u]?
- 12.568: conversely, wouldn’t this be better off [D]?
- 14.209/14.443/etc: additional instances where you can create some nice swingy jacks by actually following the tonality of the melody
- 34.853: sounds like a missing 32nd for something here
- 35.068: this trill feels out of place to me, given that the more musically accurate places for trills (26.865/41.865/45.381, etc) are actually more spread out patterns
- 54.990: move to [u]
- 1:04.365: probably should be a jump; however, why are all these jumps accented here but not at 1:01.787?
- 1:10.146/1:10.303: missing notes
- 1:17.803: bunch of missing percussion here for a transitional accent
- 1:11.240 to 1:26.162: jump usage is a little strange here - the snare very clearly accents all snares, which is good, but some of the other extraneous jumps are a little less clear; the triples feel a bit freeform in their placement and appear to accommodate for piano terminations - it’s not perfect but it’s reasonably acceptable
- 1:12.842: missing 48th for piano (you accent them at 1:14.209)
- 1:16.513: should be 32nds
- 1:43.896/1:44.131/1:44.365: ghost notes, echoes don’t land here either
- 1:47.646/1:47.881/1:48.115/etc: ^, check these to make sure you’re not adding things that don’t need to be there in the second phrase of this section
- 1:55.381/1:55.771: missing notes for snares
- 1:56.396: missing note for melody
- 2:10.537: missing percussion notes here, but I get it now after seeing it a few times; you’re trying to give the most power to the triples first to allow for the other notes to be sectional transitions - with that in mind, it feels alright
- 2:21.318: either move this jump to not feature the U, or better, move the whole [u][D][L] repeating triplet motif over to a [R][u][D] structure instead; it’ll more visually separate things -- as it is currently, you feature a [u][D][L] for two different melodic arpeggiations
- 2:24.287: very nice attention to detail
- 2:33.896/2:34.365: add the missing 48th after these two notes
- 2:35.928: missing note
- 2:37.334: missing note
- 2:41.631: how dare you accent this glissando with a forward roll instead of a backward one, shame on you (not really a big deal, just had to be silly)
- 2:50.537/3:20.537: with the exception of a few additional flourishes, this is a 32 measure copy/paste from earlier, and therefore any notes corresponding to that section will apply here as well
- as many things I perceive there to be incorrect with this file, I do like this song a lot and do think that it’s quite fun from a player perspective -- so I’ll keep your hopes alive with a CQ min-rating
- you’d do best to alleviate copy-pasting issues and capture the various missing elements -- given that you did a direct copy/paste at the end there, the song might play a little too long and a cut might be worth consideration

Tap on Damen (Pizza69) [8/10]
Artist: The Flashbulb -- Perms: OK

- the only thing that appears to be wrong with this file is the time signature itself; your BPM lends it to agreement with a 3/4 structure, but the melody and percussion line seem pretty clearly to be 4/4 structure -- with your current chart, the downbeat alternates between a red and a blue
- 1:04.077 to end: from start point of this section, it feels like some jumps are missing compared to your previous structure and there’s no real reason to omit them structurally/musically
- rhythms and PR are solid, no real complaints

Tower of Heaven -Full moon Revenge- (suicidaln00b) [7/10]
Artist: Yuuyu -- Perms: OK

- 23.436: move to [R] and move the L at 23.544 to a [D] for best pitch relevance
- 25.067: ghost note - melody doesn’t land here and percussion does not follow 16ths (if you intend on following percussion, you’re creating a polyrhythm)
- 26.479: this minijack is unnecessary; you’re already capturing the percussion using jumps and having minijacks on top of it, you’re creating an unnecessary double accent
- 29.454: missing note for melody
- 29.622: hi-hat is 24ths here
- 35.389/35.606: if you move these off of [D], then your pitch relevance at 35.714 that leverages a trill will be better noticed because it’s separated from the previous pattern
- 36.656: not quite the correct rhythm here
- 37.891: background sound continues to play 24ths until 38.740, so no 32nds until that point (with your current structure, there shouldn’t be any unless you decide to omit percussion)
- 41.738: if your structure aims to use the open hi-hats for jumps, this should be one
- 43.879/44.753/48.594: ^
- 50.327: this sequence of jumps doesn’t adequately follow the percussion
- 54.042/etc: if these white notes are for the hi-hats, then you’re missing notes at 53.973, 55.603
- 57.465: this is simply a 24th, at 57.456
- 59.042: missing 32nd for tom
- 59.738 to 1:03.181: jump usage here is a bit strange given that it’s almost certainly following percussion (inferred by the lack of jumps at 1:00.598/1:02.312), but it doesn’t give attention to the kicks at 1:00.492/1:00.704 or 1:02.204/1:02.421, and the 16ths running are for the melody meaning that even if you’re using accented layering or direct layering, there should be jumps here for sure
- 1:04.447: not sure why this triple is here over any other spot
- 1:05.260: the only thing that I can hear following this is the piano playing a single note that’s way in the background, and if that’s the case, then you should be putting the note on the 16th at 1:05.206
- 1:12.221: missing note for synth
- 1:20.307: noticeable copy paste, at least for the first half of this section; thankfully it’s short -- if you’re aiming to keep the jumps the same for pitch relevance purposes, that’s fine, but stuff in between can definitely be moved around a bit
- 1:31.988: missing note for kick
- 1:32.879: 12th jump here isn’t needed; the 16th (1:32.843) is where the accented open hi-hat is
- 3:16.721: missing jump for kick, given that this is a highly percussion focused section
- 3:29.519: no need for a jump here, imo
- some slight noticeable copy-pasted bits from the first half of the percussive climax, but not a huge amount - it’s passable
- jump usage needs some tuning up in a few spots and a few missing percussive elements can be picked up on, but this file has a respectable structure and does a good job progressing - a little bit of clean up on this file will go a long way

We Want To Run (Gradiant) [8.5/10]
Artist: Frums -- Perms: OK

- 21.482: not sure about the inclusion of this jack given that it’s the only time you follow this particular sound before having it carried away by the other melody - might be better to simply remove these notes altogether
- 39.057 to 46.958: note placement can be -slightly- improved for PR purposes, but it’s not that bad as is
- 1:13.131: missing jump for brass + percussion landing
- 2:29.427/2:37.328: I’d add the note here for the deep background kicks, but it’s most certainly not necessary given that the focus is the piano melody
- 2:47.451 to 3:032.54: <3 (althouuuuuuuugh, if we want to be picky, change at 2:50.414 is -technically- not necessary.)
- 3:43.501/3:51.402: missing triples?
- simple structure, but highly effective. good pitch relevance overall as well.
- great example of “very hard, but fair” in my eyes, though some might not agree with that ending.