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Old 05-17-2009, 02:22 AM   #2
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Your inherent use of rhyme in this poem is quite stifling, actually.

Break from the form. You're an artist. Not a conformist.

Say what you really mean, always, at all of the times you may.
For breezes blow in air often.
Each one will carry on an unknown grain of sand.
Somewhere quite distant, and profound.

No chain nor title, place nor palace, shall ever fill your waiting chalice.

You, my friend, must pour for yourself.

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Forums do quite annoy me.
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