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Family guy is funny.

So obviously quoting family guy, especially lines from obscure characters should be funny too rite?

Nope. Sorry. Spin again.

I deeply spoke unforgivingly

That sentence just kills me.

I read through your story and have to say it was really boring. The main character was uninteresting, and since it was one giant introspective monolouge with one or two speaking parts, I was very, very bored by the end. This was unaided by your lack of correct spacing. If it were broken into proper paragraphs, it might be tolerable to read, but in it's current format, you can easily lose your place. On the plus side, there were few glaring grammatical errors. Good effort, just needs to be a little more interesting.