[rzr]

You have a very large vocabulary, my friend. This first chapter was very articulate. You also have knack for description. You used the right adjectives to help me understand things. The problem was, there were too many. Don't fal into the typical pitfall of making it so descriptive the reader loses interest. I'd like to see a bit more of the setting and the main character. Try to trim out some of the run-onness to keep my interest flowing, and sprinkle in a little action. Good start.