[jono2007]

Originally Posted by kryptonlegion

ALWAYS

In the morning I get up
Jumping off the bed,
A spring in my step.
What a strange sensation
At the core of my soul.
I hope it stays with me
All day.
Slowly I remember my dream.
You talk with me
And I see you wonderful smile.
You walk with me
And I see your beautiful eyes.
I hope it stays with me
All day.
In the night I lay down
Resting on the bed,
A smile on my face.
What a strange sensation
At the core of my soul.
I hope it stays with me
Always.

Descriptive using a repetitive tone. Quite good, but to be blunt, I'm kind of sick of poems with all the 'I love this girl' sh*t. That's what this poem is about, right? A dude wakes up, deels good, remembers a dream about a girl, smiles, feels good, hopes the feeling stays. That about sums it up. Sorry if I'm being insensitive, but that's the way I feel. It's an opinion. I rest my case.