Old 04-11-2009, 04:10 AM   #1
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Hai guys. This is a poem I made a while ago. Tell me if u like it! CnC please, ratings if u want.

THE REASONS

There is a reason why I smile
There is a reason why I pray
There is a reason why I always want
To go to school today

There is a reason why I laugh
There is a reason whi I cry
There is a reason why I always want
To go ahead and try

There is a reason why I love
there is a reason why i care
There is a reason why i always want
To be right there

There is a reason why I live
There is a reason for life, too
But I can't find the reasons why
The reasons all point to you

Thankyou

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Old 04-11-2009, 04:17 AM   #2
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k ?_?

pink font didnt help
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Old 04-11-2009, 04:19 AM   #3
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k ?_?

pink font didnt help
umm..ok, any critique on the poem itself?
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Old 04-11-2009, 04:22 AM   #4
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it's really really corny

but i dont know anything poems
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Old 04-11-2009, 10:33 AM   #5
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Well, it's certainly cute...

But, in all honesty, it lacks a sense of originality. You may have written this poem, but I have read countless iterations of it.

The best poems are those that succeed at providing the reader with a unique perspective, yet this poem has failed in that regard.
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Old 04-24-2009, 11:58 PM   #6
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Just like Engler said it is something seen a million times, but don't take that too personally, we all have done it at least once in our lives.

I really like the flow of the poem. It would be appreciated if there was a little more punctuation. Why is spelled wrong "whi" no biggy though.

Truthfully there isn't much wrong at all. It is well put together, there could be a few different word choices to make a bigger impact on the reader. But overall great.
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Old 04-25-2009, 12:02 AM   #7
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And the reason is you~
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