Old 05-13-2009, 03:58 PM   #1
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Default space girl & andrea

space girl.

mother with quaking
hands, i will come
back from mars; but
only if you let me go.



andrea.

balconies with a view of the sea,
concrete jungles & clean nights
after hurricanes. the east has taken
you to sun-kissed lands with blue
mountains.

i wait.

(i miss you.)



feedback? c:

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Old 05-15-2009, 05:21 PM   #2
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I'm not certain enough of what this is supposed to be to dislike this, so I'm going to give it my approval. I can't figure out one bad thing to say about it, because I'm so goddamn confused by it.
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Old 05-15-2009, 05:22 PM   #3
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what?
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Old 05-15-2009, 06:33 PM   #4
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i entirely agree with mead

i don't see a scrap of meaning in either of these, and if there is one, it's extremely obfuscated

makes me think of shrooms poetry
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Old 05-15-2009, 07:09 PM   #5
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I'm not certain enough of what this is supposed to be to dislike this, so I'm going to give it my approval. I can't figure out one bad thing to say about it, because I'm so goddamn confused by it.
I'm going to have to agree here, because I really don't know what you're trying to get at with these.
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