05-1-2007, 07:08 AM | #21 |
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Re: "Lessons"
girls can read?
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05-1-2007, 04:56 PM | #22 |
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Re: "Lessons"
No, we're obviously illiterate. Can't you tell? =P
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05-1-2007, 04:57 PM | #23 |
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Re: "Lessons"
I myself can neither read nor write. All of my so called stories and posts can be attributed to fits of perplexing whimsy.
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05-1-2007, 05:00 PM | #24 |
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Re: "Lessons"
I have brain farts.
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05-1-2007, 05:29 PM | #25 |
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Re: "Lessons"
This conversation should be in another thread.
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05-2-2007, 12:11 AM | #26 |
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06-11-2007, 01:50 PM | #27 | |
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It took me forever to finally read this poem.
People have been whining about the cliches. I mean, every single line is a cliche. Because of that I took it to be a funny perspective on emo teenagers writing poetry filled with stock lines and forced emotions. Sorry if that sounds offensive, but that's how I saw it. As far as improvements go, if you really were going for the idea being purported with the words of the poem, I would get rid of the cliches altogether. Even one makes the work sound hackneyed. -Chaz EDIT: also, free verse may be leaving you too many options and causing you to use cliches when other forms wouldn't allow it. it's like I always say, it's easy to write mediocre free verse, but it's harder to write great free verse than a great poem in form.
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