05-18-2008, 09:30 PM
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My new poem.
I once went to a farm
Tis where I found a charm The night fell velvety On the overall levity Considering I had smoked a huge doobie which was the charm actually oh **** |
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05-19-2008, 07:19 AM
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Re: My new poem.
In before lo....
I mean... erm, Wrong place to put this, bud.
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05-19-2008, 09:08 AM
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Re: My new poem.
That poem sucked...
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05-19-2008, 09:27 AM
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Re: My new poem.
I don't think crude humor is considered funny here.
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05-19-2008, 09:32 AM
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Re: My new poem.
Unless it had been a limerick and even then...
To have a better effect the 'serious' part of the poem should have been both better and longer and the 'humorous' part both funnier and viler. I bet Chaz could wreck your ****.
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Re: My new poem.
There once was a dude on a farm.
He thought he had a measure of charm. .....His name was jono, .....He loved to get blotto, And **** all the cows in the barn. <3 blu
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05-19-2008, 09:56 AM
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Lack of faith=disturbing
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Re: My new poem.
I dont like it.... Try something like this:
Found in the summernight** shining heaven of ecstasy thunder kissin twilight** the essence of destructive parody... Here try this: Make a line that u want to ryme,then make a line that doesnt ryme with the previous line. then the next line you ryme it with the first line. see above for example =) Try that style and once u get used to it ull make awesome poems I bet. It also should be longer. XxXmetalheadXxX Last edited by XxXMetalheadXxX; 05-19-2008 at 09:59 AM.. Reason: I had a typo... |
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05-19-2008, 10:08 AM
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Re: My new poem.
Laughing out loud at work gets strange looks.
Thanks Chaz. 
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