My attempt at poetry

[All_That_Chaz]

I fell in love with this rhyme scheme a ways back and wrote this poem. I found out later that it's a slam poetry meter and rhyme scheme. All criticism is welcome.

I call it, "A Dedication"

To the girl who challenges all paradigms
Who sanctifies with but her eyes
What to myself I relate beneath my sighs
And berate my mind for my own fate.

A security blanket if the soul be timid
Anonymity burrows my whole daring each breath
To be bolder than the last (dare it be shy, dare it to pass)
What's causing me to lose all control?

Clutching the clandestine, you are the light
To every cry and every fright, you insti-
-gate the healing of all you love and all you find
But this digs you deeper into my mind.

We create for ourselves a considerable crisis
Left to our own devices what will suffice is
Strife to our core, which is what life is
Gluttony of Dionysus, we beg for more.

Dictated by ambition, we continue on
Strands of sanity plucked until they're gone
For the rest of our days, all that's left is set ablaze
What is it I'm failing to see?

Chasing non-existent wishes, together we are lost
In a passionless enigma at the cost of paths crossed
We yearn firstly for class since our desire is to learn
Because education cannot wait its turn.