Old 05-12-2009, 12:43 PM   #1
Devour
FFR Player
 
Devour's Avatar
 
Join Date: Sep 2007
Location: Denver, CO
Posts: 253
Send a message via AIM to Devour Send a message via MSN to Devour Send a message via Skype™ to Devour
Question Vines (amateur poetry)

Your greedy implications are no disguise,
Yet I fall to my knees while you arise
You rip off my days on a sturdy occasion,
Pitiful attempts of helpless evasion

You've grown in with the roots of my being,
You are the nightmares that I've been seeing;
Leeching away the fuel of my soul,
Slowly we've slipped out of control

Inevitably we become ruthlessly entwined,
Webs of insecurities foolishly combined;
Become my impossible, losing touch,
The obstacles have been just too much

Innocent compassion, wretchedly abloom,
Growing its way to weeping doom;
The futile cries of the heart as it dies,
Are unheard amongst the final goodbyes.
__________________
Devour is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 05-22-2009, 12:29 AM   #2
DevilsTouch
FFR Player
 
Join Date: Apr 2009
Location: Felton DE
Age: 33
Posts: 94
Send a message via AIM to DevilsTouch
Default Re: Vines (amateur poetry)

I really enjoyed that . I dont know much about poetry though sry. I might have go to the literature section more often . Pretty fun to read these.

Last edited by DevilsTouch; 05-22-2009 at 12:30 AM.. Reason: Grammar
DevilsTouch is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 05-22-2009, 12:43 AM   #3
hi_top
FFR Veteran
FFR Veteran
 
hi_top's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2007
Age: 31
Posts: 1,427
Default Re: Vines (amateur poetry)

I really like the imagery in this piece.
hi_top is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump



All times are GMT -5. The time now is 02:17 PM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.1
Copyright ©2000 - 2024, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Copyright FlashFlashRevolution