03-12-2009, 11:22 PM | #1 |
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prose b4 hoes
I've written many embarrassing things since high school, and some before that I don't have (one got published when I was 12 though). I have done some things recently, but only halfheartedly/haphazardly. Out of everything I have ever done on the forum, this is what I'll regret the most, I already know.
Notes on the actual works: The first was originally in something I dubbed "Topic For Freestylings" and was therefore designed for response, circa March 20th, 2008. The following is something entirely different, and from nearly a year earlier, April 20th (I celebrated nothing) 2007. To give a thorough sample, the next one is the only thing I've done with any noteworthy form outside of a class or something. Finally, something, the only thing really, that I've done lately. Note that while I don't really expect to improve, I'd like feedback all the same: ----------------- never sleeping cause i'm scheming master plans while you're still dreaming: I terrorize the city then your family is screaming just believe me, because I'm part tyrannosaur and crushin your tile floor into the pavement it's depravement, the way i take control and as a whole, in my soul it's child's play i take one step and instantly: every iota goes my way completely demolishing the information highway with a circuited circumvention quite readily, and then shifting direction diuretic inflection; the purity of my words aim to bless your mess and then the signal expresses the intense distress you feel, under the duress of my verbalized caress but surely, I only aim to impress who'd have guessed despite my plans I'm only second best? ----------------- the wicked gnash their teeth in torture weary, yea, their eyelids fall but sleep doesn't come to lie with the wicked no, they will never dream, at all alone at night, in restless slumber a snap, a fall, a ghastly blunder open my eyes to what's around impart to my ears a horrible sound words unfamiliar, fumbling, yet clear connotations quite cold -- I tense with fear and creeping in quiet, I inch down the hall a cinematic showing, there, on the wall still lit the kitchen light's lurid glow I peered around the corner though and rather than the fights i know an abyss, and a modest, meek plateau wary i walk, nary i think that this could be the time i sink into the black and the unknown oh, what child's eyes are shown alone i stand upon display a blast of wind expended my way a beast in black, gnashing madly it's open maw invites me, gladly oh no thank you -- I won't accept as it's been ages since I've slept it's gallant wings flapping about the dragon in me has been let out trite, trite trite, I want to shout this poem's redundant, and what's it about? but no, oh no, the show goes on a valiant soldier, clad in dawn bravely steps up -- the child is safe! she wouldn't have lasted alone, the waif but in one simple chomp, our heroes gone now who will help her carry on oh now... ----------------- The static and memories sit taciturn glaring with spite, and dissident; intersection of the two is what he yearns for while his preoccupations are spent on cool calculations and crisp precision and rationale meets whimsy, eliminates no music hears he; perpetual intermission but somewhere small a child awaits and he clings ravenously to the tailpipes of the sensible car; whose ignition screams his young mind catches sparks, ignites as he surrenders business to dreams ----------------- inexorable and exhausting comparisons occur --- pusling, i percolate, languid, into bursts of time streams of consciousness spill forth from the parietal and both are intermingling, to the consistency of plagioclase. they coalesce into a cluster an acrylic abrasion along alabaster a message to touch; words say too much with less meaning. only through feeling (yes, I decided to stop right there; I don't know what else to do for now, feel free to write the ending though, haha) Last edited by Svaz; 03-29-2009 at 10:00 AM.. Reason: tiny horse penises |
03-13-2009, 01:55 PM | #2 |
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Re: microscopic horse appendages
I know throwing around words is fun, but I prefer to play with words in favor of altering meaning, rather than trying to make meaning conform to a rhyming scheme.
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03-14-2009, 06:31 PM | #3 |
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Re: microscopic horse appendages
Oh, did I do that too much, you think? While the first and last didn't really have any specific goal in mind (the first was more of a poorly imitated style, I guess -- the last was just the most recent reworking of things I'd written down in a poor attempt to summarise words in my head, if THAT makes any sense) but the other two I sort of had something a bit more to write about? I mean, even then they're kind of uncomfortable, I guess. I don't know.
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