[TC_Halogen]

Asked if it was alright for me to simply post my notes earlier and was told that I was able to do so.

Judge: TC_Halogen

GREEN HOODIES (ilikexd) [8/10]
Artist: KURORAK -- Perms: OK

- 16.296: missing note for click
- 1:35.994: move the note on [u] somewhere else to completely disconnect the visual of the previous melody, since it starts on [R] at this spot
- really basically nothing wrong with it; file is solid structurally and done with clear intent
- 2:34.016 to end: I found this to be a bit more fun than the rest of the chart since it serves as a combination of multiple chart elements, nice work overall
- not incredibly engaging or interesting as a whole, but certainly acceptable

Naive Hopelessness (VisD) [8.5/10]
Artist: Clonepa -- Perms: OK

- 41.991: this repeating 3-note pattern looks a little weird here
- 58.599: i’d move this [L] to an [R] since you’ve got the two [L]’s before this that correspond to kicks
- 1:03.688: very nice flam usage
- 1:22.349: detach [R] from this jump to prevent it visually looking like three repeats for kicks
- 1:37.706/1:40.563: one of these two repeating patterns should be changed (likely the first one to make things have a bit more continuity when you hit the slowdown) for the purpose of PR -- the first one could easily be a repeating [L][u][D][R] instead since there’s no deviation like earlier; if you do this, adjust the same melody in the slowdown as well
- 2:12.349: missing jump here; this snare’s not particularly filtered out yet
- 2:20.553/2:21.089: same jump, two instruments -- change one of them
- 2:21.446/etc: this particular sound seems to have inconsistent representation within your structure; it seems to show up as a jump when the background piano collides, but there are some instances where it’s alone and is still doubled up (2:30.017, 2:35.732) and others where it’s not (2:24.303, 2:41.446)
- in general, I feel like the last bit of the song has a more inconsistent structure, but everything before 2:18.946 is very well done
- still enough to be acceptable, this chart has an excellent and highly regimented structure beforehand

Snorestore (hi19hi19) [8/10]
Artist: Virt -- Perms: OK

- 27.183: might be better as [LU]
- 1:41.308: not quite right; a bit earlier than this 8th and only two notes
- 1:54.433/1:54.683/1:54.933: piano doesn’t quite come in here as well as it did earlier, nor are there any background brass accents that pick up the slack; these three jumps feel slightly out of place
- as a whole, the file feels pretty good to play -- however, the jump usage for accenting feels a bit questionable at times; it’s definitely intended to play a bit more freeform and for the most part it feels ok
- very good tournament file, imo

Stress Fracture (trumaestro) [5.5/10]
Artist: JT Bruce -- Perms: OK

- 4.869/etc: if the intent is to give the lower guitar accenting power with repeated notes, then you’re going to want to make sure that columns are free when you transition to accenting chords so it doesn’t seem like you’re repeating notes an incorrect number of times
- 11.583: missing note for snare, which is a core part of your layering/accenting here
- 13.869: this is clever, I like it
- 22.011: [LD] for most accuracy in PR
- 23.154: missing jump for guitar accent
- 26.583: missing jump (you add one for a similar melody/phrase at 22.011)
- 28.154: likely shouldn’t be a jump if you want to give the most attention to the melody, as this particular guitar note is exactly the same as the secondary chugs at 27.583/27.726/27.869
- 33.011: remove jump, neither snare or open hi-hat land here
- 33.440: missing jump for open hi-hat
- 36.869: remove note
- 38.154/38.297: melodically these two notes are different than the ones you follow with the repeated up arrow tapping
- 42.154: remove jump, same as 33.011 -- if the intent is to actually capture the kicks, then you’re missing one at 42.869 (and the same corresponding jump earlier on as well)
- 49.869: if the two [D]’s before this are for the guitar, then this jump should have a [D] as well
- 53.154/53.440: this sequence of jumps makes it seem like you’re giving attention to snares here, and if you are - there are numerous missing snares earlier and throughout this section; if not, you’d do better to separate these two jumps so that one accents the guitar’s pitch and the other is just a filler
- 56.583: missing note for kick
- 58.940: missing note for kick
- 1:05.297/1:06.011/1:06.297: missing notes for guitar
- 1:15.583: quite a few [u]’s here despite the melody changing up every three notes
- 1:22.154: if you start this sequence on [u] instead of [D] and keep the backwards pattern, you’ll effectively separate the snares that come back here
- 1:26.726: why are these kicks being followed right here but not anywhere else in this section, where the kicks playing on 16ths are a brand new musical element?
- 1:38.297: having these jumps as [LD] give the guitar emphasis on the [L] a bit of an early accent; you should either move the jumps or change the column that is anchored
- 1:47.011: missing snare
- 1:49.297: ^
- 2:00.083: missing note for guitar
- 2:23.011: missing note for kick
- 2:28.083: missing note for snare
- 2:30.940: somewhat similar deal as 1:22.154; with your first trill being [R]-[L] for the guitar, this note for the drums makes the guitar accent appear like it’s a note earlier
- there’s parts of this that are reasonably done but a lot of this chart is inundated with largely inconsistent jump use -- sections where jumps are used reasonably are unfortunately counteracted with large sequences of unclear repetition; pitch relevance is noticeable through the heavy layering, though
- despite being a touch under 3 minutes, this feels pretty draggy

Vast Universe (mi40) [5.5/10]
Artist: Vospi vs. KOTOKO -- Perms: OK

- 10.734 to 32.067: with the exception of 20.067 to 21.401/25.401 to 26.734 - this stream is pretty generic and doesn’t really have much pattern control, it’s just everywhere
- 31.692: ghost note
- 53.901 to 1:12.067: patterning is very staircase heavy, particularly in the second half, and really doesn’t do much in terms of trying to make the patterning stand out in some way
- 1:13.484/1:14.151: ghost notes for vocals
- 1:13.817: missing note for vocals
- 1:36.068 to 2:16.068: I’d be much more willing to give these streams that seem to just be nothing more than pace setting a chance if there was something that the player actually had to pay attention to while doing it; you’ve got a solid vocal line and even an opportunity for a 3 repeated measures of something + 1 transitional measure starting at 1:57.401 -- it’s just seeming like the player is supposed to stream without any real rhyme or reason.
- 1:59.818: missing bass note; after the termination at 1:59.568, it starts right back up again
- 2:18.734 to 2:37.401: and, by having the basic 16th streams + 4th jumps structure that you’ve got earlier on for a majority of the song, you lose the opportunity to create something different for this section when a synth actually noticeably arrives with 16th note melodies - this unfortunately introduces a bit of a drag
- 2:40.068 to 2:49.401: not the best of execution, but I understand the idea and it was a good idea to introduce this kind of change, as the trills are something a player wouldn’t have dealt with before; the few jumps in here feel a bit strange since they don’t seem to accent something discrete
- 2:53.901/2:55.901/2:59.234: missing jump for vocals
- 3:05.401: the three previous jumps should be changed off of [LD] so that these [LD] stand out as their own accent
- 3:34.568: change either the [u] or the [UR] so that there’s not a repeating note
- this chart’s unfortunately really generic -- it’s got a consistent application of layering, but it’s not always correct in approach and in general, the streaming patterns don’t do anything worthwhile, nor do the layering that supports it

Vida (Xtreme2252) [6/10]
Artist: Venetian Snares -- Perms: OK

- numerous ghost notes (26.171, 26.809, 28.724, 41.490, 43.684*, 45.320, 47.793, etc)
- 33.112: missing jump (this percussion instrument gets a jump at 32.793)
- 34.389: missing note for deep bass blip
- 38.538: missing jump (instrument accented at 37.261)
- 39.974/40.931: listen to these two sounds; 39.974 is very linear, making a 9 note roll like that accurate -- however, 40.931 is a percussive element that has a “wave” in terms of volume, where it hits louder, fades in, then comes back -- you could better accent the burst at 40.931 by having a burst that starts a bit faster, “fades”, and then returns (say, 96ths -> 48ths -> 96ths); if you do this, make the pattern smooth of an exit, as your current burst forces 16ths at 188 on [L]
- ^, this mindset above can be used for a lot of different breakcore sampling, just get a feel for the sound and the abrasion it produces; if it’s a jarring sound in comparison to the rest, you can afford to give it a bit (within reason) more of a tougher pattern -- not to say utilizing something with a fast mini-jack but it doesn’t have to be a straight roll
- 46.676/46.836: minijacks are technically incorrect here
- 47.155/47.314: missing notes, you follow these bass blips earlier
- 48.190: not sure why you’d do jumps like this
- 56.570: this 64th mini-trill is a bit nasty
- 1:07.102: this is also a pretty nasty burst given the sound you’re following - it’s not particularly abrasive
- 1:07.540: missing note on the 64th here
- 1:09.455: would definitely add a note here
- 1:12.447: missing note
- 1:20.506: no need for a minijack here
- 1:22.261: a minijack would however be very appropriate here
- 1:34.788: missing note
- 1:35.878: misrhythm, should be at the 32nd at 1:35.905
- 1:39.256: another missing note
- 1:43.724: missing note
- 2:01.357: why not use the accenting method at 1:54.974? same sound and a faster pace
- 2:48.272: this burst is way early compared to the snare buzz that I think you’re trying to accent (at 2:48.591) - there’s basically no other reason for this to be here otherwise
- 2:56.251: missing note
- 3:11.650: missing note
- 3:15.001: missing note
- 3:25.852/(etc): missing note - this note is way too loud and prominent to simply ignore with empty space compared to the rest of the area; you should definitely be filling these in for both sections
- 3:49.548: not quite the correct rhythm
- 3:54.814/3:56.729/(etc): missing notes for the thing you accented just seconds ago; representation is definitely inaccurate
- the jump usage and pitch relevance in this file do need some work, as it’s often not the clearest when you’re trying to pay attention to melodic elements and when you’re not
- I gave you a lot of notes for this because I honestly see a LOT of effort went into this, and I do feel like it’s worth being commended for; while the rating I’m giving you makes it ineligible for a tournament file, I’d love to see you take the notes, fix it up and submit this to a regular batch, because this would be an exceptional first file from you given the technicality and general approach you took. This is by far the most complex and interesting thing you've sent to any batch that I've seen so far.