[Reincarnate]

Honestly, if I were grading that, I'd give it a very low score. It seems to be a very surface-level analysis of the poem and doesn't really say much (and seems to miss the mark entirely with stuff like "complex language" which is a throwaway). There are all sorts of facets/parallels to draw from and virtually none of it was mentioned.

There's no mention of the driftwood, or the metaphoric nature of the water with respect to decisions, or the purpose of the crickets, or the point being hammered home by the dogs jumping into the water, etc.

It seems like you really, really rushed in your response without taking the time to peel the poem apart first. You'd have a lot more to write about that way, and it'd help make your analysis a little more thorough/cohesive.

I'd simply ask you, at this point, to try again and focus more on understanding the poem first before you write. I think it helps to get the basic idea first and then figure out the point each stanza/whatever tries to make.