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Yeah I got bored so I did this.

Originally Posted by beary605

Song: I UPDATED MY F-LIST by Renard
(Genre: Breakcore)
Length: 3:11 (191 secs), Style: 4-key
Difficulty: maybe 75-76? on FFR scales (166 BPM, very technical)

I UPDATED MY F-LIST (Beary605)

15.943 - Perhaps add a grace note 'round here
25.394 - Please no quad here. Make it a hand
26.109 - You know, I really fucking hate renard files, but this section here was actually really fun. Nicely stepped.
51.230 - Missing jump
53.579 - Missing jump
54.844 - Missing jump
58.459 - ^
59.543 - ^ (Yeah there seems to be a pattern here. Re-check this section. A lot of them happen on the 8th notes but I'm noticing some on 4th notes also.
72.374 / 73.097 / 73.820- I dunno 'bout you but I rather see these 4th notes as jumps. Would match the music better imo.
78.157 - Same as above
79.724 - The 12th notes here repeat, so imo make it 34/34 or something, then swap 79.965 to 12 or something to compensate.
80.085 - Same here
80.507 - Missing note
80.688 - Step this measure
81.772 - Keep these hands if you want to put a hand at the beginning of this section. Add them accordingly where needed. Otherwise, take out the hands. (But I wouldn't, since you have been doing it for the whole song already)
82.856 - Ew. I dunno I don't like this section for some reason. Sadly I don't really have any recommendations…. this isn't a helpful comment is it? lol…
85.929 - PR would go good here, Try making it a defending hand pattern?
86.471 - An upward roll would be good here matching the string section, since you did that in the beginning.
90.447 - See 72.374
91.169 - See 79.724
92.073 - Missing note
92.254 - Step this measure. Okay it's getting obvious you did a cut 'n paste to fill this in, and perhaps did something like a mirror. Make sure you don't forget to re-check everything when doing that
92.615 - Same as what i said above, you know the drill.
95.507 - This section is really fun, but make sure you PR it to match the rest of your file. You are missing jumps and notes everywhere. Quite sloppy here.
101.290 - This isn't stepped right. Recheck this.
112.495 - You are missing that jack thingy you always do here.
114.302 - I am in LOVE with this pattern. Others will probably disagree though lmfao
120.086 - Missing note around here
122.977 - Same here
123.700 - And here
125.860 - aaannd heeerreee
128.670 - You get the idea, there is one more after
130.929 - You know I'd like to see hands used in this section. It would work. Up to you.
141.773 - I don't really have much to say about this whole section besides that I think you don't need to turn it into a dump like this. Take out a lot of the unnecessary 16th notes imo… but once again it's up to you. It seems kinda cluttered right now.
157.857 - I like this part
172.135 - Ew this is yuckky. Make this more user friendly :P
173.039 - You really don't like stepping this note here don'tcha?
173.219 - Or this whole measure? lmfao
176.111 - I don't really get why you did this. Meh, go back to your jack thingy you did before.
179.003 - Should be 32nds here
180.000 - You already know what I am gonna say

Overall, not bad. You have some work to do though. Lots of small errors. Also please remove the chart you are not using. I got 2 chart with this file.

Originally Posted by RARAWR

Song: HELLO GENTLEMEN by The Sapphire Dragon
Genre: J-Core
Length: 353 Seconds (5:53)
Style: 4-Key, Spread (Made with Up-scroll in mind, down-scroll will likely find it best to use mirror)
Difficulty: 65-70 on the FFR scale if I had to guess.

Hallo Gentlemen (Rarawr)

3.973 - Lmfao wtf is going ooooooonnnnnn!! Okay, you don't need to step the sound of a vibrator with 24th notes… Instead just put one note. It will do. Trust me.
14.795 - Don't do a left handed tril like this. Do a roll or something easier.
15.616 - Instead of stepping hands, and literally just hands, make this jumps instead. Then step the offbeats with an 8th note. It will make the file flow a lot better.
22.192 - This is the first place where a hand SHOULD be used.
28.767 - There are claps that you could be stepping. It will make the file progress more. Step those.
41.918 - This section isn't a gallop section. Those 12th notes should be 8th notes.
68.219 - Okay for the main melody, listen closely and PR this. Right now the notes just go everywhere and thats a no no. Also while I'm on this section, every time when you hear the chords change a jump can go there, instead of just making it a stream of single notes.
95.342 - No quad please. A hand would be just fine. Or even a jump.
122.055 - Missing jump
124.315 - Same here
125.137 - And here
130.685 - Here you just swapped styles here. Keep it consistent. Either make it a jump stream or don't.
147.124 - I actually like this section, but its such a spike from everything else you are doing. Also, its very very repudiative. Find a way to make it unique somehow. I can go more n depth with you later if you want about this.
171.782 - WALL OF DEEEATTTTHHHH OH LAWRDDYY
173.425 - You can layer this more. A lot is missing.
200.000 - Okay you should end the file here IMO. Its too long and repetitive. I'd make comments about the second half of this file but its un-needed because its literally the exact same errors from what I stated above.


Overall, this really really really needs a cut. It's not bad for starting out, but you have a ways to go. Add me on Skype and I'll chat with ya and give ya some advice if ya want. I'm no pro but I can def point ya in the right direction.

Originally Posted by Callipygian

Song: A Fifth of Beethoven by Walter Murphy
Genre: Disco
Length: 183 seconds (3:03)
Style: 4-Key, Spread
Difficulty: FMO with some tricky trills

A Fifth of Beethoven (Callipygian)

0.000 - LMFAO I LOVE THIS SONG Bahahahaha
0.000 - Okay, the offset is wrong to the start. From the very first measure the entire chart is off sync. To sync it, make sure you match the wavelength to the music accordingly (if using DDream) if using Stepmania, nudge the measure a bit. Right now it's really really late.
0.001 - Okay, this is a swing file, so really you got the notes all wrong. Instead of 16th notes they should be 24th notes and what not. Listen closely at a slower speed, you can tell.
0.002 - Really it's hard to look at the file when it's off sync and the notes are not stepped correctly. This needs to be re-worked.

33.166 - You know, jumps would be better then hands. You seem to favor hands a lot in this file. Sadly, it doesn't need it. Cut back on them a LOT. It will also clean up a lot of patterns in this file.
40.193 - You have a lot of ghost notes that don't exist in the file. Play this file at a slow speed. It will be a lot better for ya.
51.953 - No hands please, no quad either
63.220 - Unnecessary pattern here. It should be more of a background sound then anything. Or, here is a good place to put a hold. This happens a few times. Apply for all.
88.774 - Okay this is getting insane. Cut back on the difficulty a lot here. The patterns here are really annoying to play.
90.00 - (Ish, around this section) I get you want to do holds on the strings, however it can be done by just one note. Granted, you can hear two+ notes, but right now you are really constraining yourself.
100.132 - Okay, these jacks are really unnecessary. Not needed at all. They are just ghost notes. Take em out. A hold would be good here.
101.231 - 173.000 - A lot around here is what I said above. Its way overstepped for what it is. the quads are really unnecessary, and the hands are unnecessary as well.


Overall, really pay attention to when notes hit, and where. I can help you out if ya need. Also make sure the sync is correct. That is a MUST or giant lizards will come and eat your soul. Keep practicing, you will get better.