05-13-2009, 08:33 PM
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FFR Player
Join Date: Dec 2004
Location: fighting villains from afar, NJ
Age: 32
Posts: 6,222
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Re: "Angel" My first love poem
You used "doth" amid your distinctly twenty first century English.
Most of what you say is stupid and uninspired and doesn't invoke any sort of images or emotions in my head.
"Dreaming of my Angel, [...] This radiant Angel of mine," -- Yeah we get it. She's your "angel."
"She's always there for me, / Through the good times and the bad," -- There are some cliche lines in this poem but oh man this takes the cake.
Poetry will not win you any chicks, bro.
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