[ositzxz369]

Updated Benson & Hedges (Venetian Snares Remix). IDK how to multi-quote, so here's some dumb formatting of the concerns I had with some of the notes below. Any unmentioned notes are those that I've addressed in this 2nd draft. Number (1-7) is AJ's notes, XXX is my thoughts.

Benson & Hedges (Venetian Snares Remix) (ositzxz369) [7.5/10]
Artist: Shitmat -- Perms: OK

(1.) - 12.960: the three repeating 8th notes are a recurring theme (12.960, 14.355, 15.751, 18.541, ), but it’s really hard to understand why the third repeat is there in most instances, as only the first two notes are really audible over the percussion. Additionally, your PR can be improved if you’re going to actually represent those pitches as a part of your structure.

XXX - Made an attempt to address 12.960, 14.355, 15.751, 18.541 (and also the unmentioned 31.098, 32.493, 33.889, 35.284, 54.819, 56.214, 57.609, 1:00.401, 2:00.401, 2:04.413, (After this, I lost count of the other spots that had this issue – but I did address them). Hopefully I assumed correctly on what u meant by saying the “third repeat”.

(2.) - 36.941: I hear what this is following, but it’s definitely tough to hear at 100% rate; might be worth reducing/removing.

XXX - Do u mean this one arrow OR the 32nds between 36.854-37.203? I’m currently assuming the former.

(3.) - 1:00.576/1:01.186: another opportunity for strong instrument relevance - if you change the [D]-[R] mini-trill to an [u]-[R], then the pattern at 1:01.186 is a continuation because they both use the same instruments (and are tied to the same arrows)

XXX - So 1:00.576 and 1:01.186 aren’t EXACTLY the same noise, but I’ll still do ur suggestion.

(4.) - 1:05.895: ghost note

XXX - Nope, this one note is part of the subtle flute background.

(5.) - 1:13.134/1:13.221/1:13.308: these three notes correspond to snares, and those same snares play at 1:13.831 -- these are opportunities to really tighten up your chart structure and maximize the flow against the music

XXX - Not sure wat ur suggesting I do here. I’m assuming I was being inconsistent on the patterning of these two snare triplets, so I’ll attempt to fix that.

(6.) - 2:14.180/2:18.366: missing jump for kick (you do them at 2:12.785 and 2:12.959)

XXX - I was aware that 2:14.180 (and also 2:18.366) was supposed to be a jump, but I white-noted it b/c I didn’t want to make a 16th mini-jack off a mini-jumpglut (e.g. [12][14], where the [14] is a different sound from the preceding [34][12][34][12]). For 2:18.366, the same white-note logic was applied here, but now I relistened to this section again and just noticed there was 3 pitch changes instead of 2 (basically one more jumptrill transition), so please rejudge this small section if time permits.

(7.) - 2:33.715: since you’re working with a drum solo and not any sort of melody, you can afford to mix up the patterns a bit while still keeping the relevance - a simple mirror for the repeating drum patterns will make this feel a lot less dull

XXX - Gonna need an example of a "mix-up'd pattern" for this one. If “a simple mirror” means stepping a descending sound as an ascending pattern, I’m not comfortable with that.