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holy shit Puppet your stuff never fails to amaze me. only thing (and this is honestly more a personal thing than anything) is that you may want to try reading these out loud, especially when they use more complex vocabulary: it's important to make sure that they don't break the flow of the piece or feel out-of-place/at odds with the setting or content of your poetry, especially since it's a story (I think)?

overall it's tight, loving the vivid imagery and the powerful voice\

shit i need to start poetry again but i cannot get off of my ass, somebody motivate me